hi, a german friend of mine is writing lyrics in english for his band .he gave me this to correct it, but my english is not that good. what do you think about the lyrics , and is ist the english all spelled right ?


a hot summer night there in the city of angels
unawareness extends over the house on the hills as
the devil arrives with his attendants at cielo drive
the only resaon for this is to take the pregnants life

chorus :

poor sharon tate
struck by the hand of fate

a threatning sound frightens sharon and her friend,
the end is near for this little hollywood romance.
deperate crying in the summer of love,
followed by scences you cant even think of

chorus

so far so good. thanks for your help

dont be lazy..

GS, these words are terrible. I'm not criticizing here LOL, but maybe I should. Tell your friend to not write in English anymore.

My freind Ike who doesn't speak English could write better lyrics.

ROCKMAN

It should be threatening and desperate.